Birdwatcher Watched


Perched balanced and poised
A feathered jewel
Your wordless statement
As you look me in the eye
Leaves me nowhere left to hide


About Ben Naga

Pilgrim on the lam. Please feel free to explore the links to learn more. I trust you will find some things there will have been worth the effort. See you there.

Posted on July 28, 2017, in Tanka and tagged , , , . Bookmark the permalink. 4 Comments.

  1. Beautiful jewel of a poem, Ben. Love the last line!

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  2. I find the meaning of this a bit mysterious, Ben. The whole poem turns on “Your wordless statement/As you look me in the eye,” but, of course, as you meant, we are left unsure who “your” is. Is it the bird? That seems to be the clever message of the title, “Birdwatcher Watched.” That also goes along with the “feathered jewel” phrase. But why did a bird looking the birdwatcher in the eye leave the watcher nowhere to hide? What kind of statement of “be” is so powerful the watcher cannot hide from it? The your could also be a volta, a turn in the sense of the poem. The birdwatcher could be watched by an unnamed other. I suspect you meant the poem to be about the bird watching the watcher, but perhaps when we watch other sentience while something larger than bird and watcher is watching us, we do have nowhere left to hide. I find this a wondrous diamond of a poem with several possible facets that glitter inside thinking about reality.

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