a sweep of blue
with tints of coral
and shadows of clear white

in the breeze
birds rose
like smoke

old eyes
blue and tranquil
gazed at their own reflections

at the waving water
the soul of it all, indescribable
this mirrored blue sky

the light, dazzling
nothing to exhibit
but infinite blue

the air a crystal
burning yet tender
for the eternal was here

eternal happiness
eternal youth
a moment in the day

that appeared
and vanished
like an evil thought


– This blackout poem was extracted from CHAPTER XII of “The Blue lagoon: A Romance” by H. de Vere Stacpoole”. (

About Ben Naga

The Spirit that graces me with its passing has no name and stems not from thoughts and words, though it gathers them up as it flows, but from feeling.

Posted on September 5, 2013, in Blackout Poetry, Poetry, Writing and tagged , , , , . Bookmark the permalink. 12 Comments.

  1. Very nice! I will have to try the black out one of these days.


  2. morning Ben…can you tell me if my post this morning popped up in your reader ?


  3. That turned out beautifully! I never would’ve guessed how/where it came from.


  4. Mahusay, as always!

    Out of curiousity, how long does it usually take you to finish a blackout?


  5. So now you are teaching me Tagalog? 🙂 Thank you

    It varies widely. Depends only partly on the text. It is the amount of time taken to insert/remove/reinsert blocks of text that takes the time, rather than the time taken on deciding which words to take out or retain. I can only guess, really, but it’s probably between one and two hours. Whenever I am composing something, whether a blackout, a straight poem, a song, some prose, even an e-mail, I kind of float free of time and space. Then at a certain point I may “come to” and realise I need to eat or drink or visit the bathroom. If a blackout process loses its direction or energy too much I stop working on it and return another day, when I have more positive energy, and the problems will sort themselves after a while. How about you and *your* process?


  6. I happened across this one again due to some new comments, I liked it the first time, and even more the second!


    • Some things are worth experiencing more than once, I have noticed. A number of my favourite albums I didn’t think much of the first time I listened to them. Frequently, the first time I encounter I spend a lot of my attention working out where I am. It’s only then that I actually begin noticing what there is to notice.


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